My mind is home to many people, they think differently,
They love with all my heart and exquisite thoughts they dart,
They will make you mad, not with love but with annoyance,
They will surprise you, not with humor but with terror.
……
They live within me and think differently,
They do things that surprise me.
……
One says “Don’t give up.” and the other “This much practice is enough.”
They say “God has a plan.” but at times of trouble, leave me all alone to face the challenge.
……
They tell me I have innumerable friends but not one with whom I can share my feelings as well,
They whisper, “Keep calm, everything falls into place.” but when tragedy strikes, they are the first ones to break.
One is as fragile as a flower, touch it and it’ll break.
One is as dangerous as a time bomb, fidget with it and it’ll burst with anger. Your actions you will regret.
……
One is as diaphanous as a flimsy fabric, touch it once and it’ll make you turn back time.
The other, too demure, loves to think till my head explodes. I deplore the voice that broods.
Oh and sometimes, the confident voice becomes a bit too high held, it’s the cause of all my behavior so supercilious,
There also lives a voice too cranky. It’s the cause of my behavior too peevish.
There is a voice that says “You can do it.” It is making me proactive.
……
One makes me sweet but what happens when anger reaps? It forms a shell to defend any other lapping that protects my delicate heart.
I hear and rejoice in the dulcet noise. But how am I supposed to figure out which is the best advice?
Okay. We all have different thoughts and different people exist in us. I would absolutely love to hear your feedback or any constructive criticism. This is just the 1st draft of the poem so I dunno if it’s good but then again any feedback would be more than welcome.
So I am working on a novel and this is basically the message I am trying to convey. I will share the first part as soon as I am done with it!
P.S. A huge thank-you to Phoenix. I wasn’t too sure of publishing this but she encouraged me and I love her for that! Thanks a lot, Phoenix!
©Rishika Jain 2020. All rights reserved.
You’ve beautifully depicted the different thoughts!!
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Thank you so so much, Aashi🤗💜
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Keep writing!! My pleasure 💛
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Aww,,thanks a lot! 💕
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🙂
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Damn! I thought you were not okay.
Go for it. Whether it turns out good or not so good, just do it. It’ll definitely make you learn a lot of things. No matter what the feedback is, do your thing. Improve where you should and ignore if anyone tries to demotivate you.
Congratulations and all the best for it.❤️❤️❤️
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Haha…I am okay. But my character might not be..lol😂😂
Thank you sooooooo much! Yes, it will teach me something. This is probably the best piece of advice I’ll get. Thank you so much❤❤
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That makes my day!❤️
I so wanted to publish but not that sure yet. Also, no time. Pheww!😒
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Wanted to publish what? It’s okay, I am sure you will get time😂, someday!
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Hehehe… Obvio a book.🙄🤦🏼♀️
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OhKay! You can still right one, if you get the time😁
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See.. High!😂 I can still left one?
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Oops! Sorry, I meant “write”
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I know what you mean. But, I’m just proving my point.😁😬
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Okay! 😁
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😁🤗
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🤗🤗
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Beautifully written ! I hope that you overcome hard times and I personally feel they are very important for a writer, it shapes our perspective 💖
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Thank you!
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Beautifully articulated!!✨✨✨
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Thank you so much!
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Pleasure is all mine, Rishika💮
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So real! I love it 😊
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Thank you so very much 😀
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Oh, my Mystic Inkslinger, you always amaze me with your write-ups, I loved it, how beautifully you depicted it 💙💙💙💙
Keep writing and as I always say, it does not matter it is good or not, keep doing your work, it will slowly be best, the greatest, you learn, you mature with each step whether good or bad, the experience you gain will always remain
And you know what I think writers have power of words, they can say how much they want even in so less words
And you do that
I can see and believe, one day, you will publish a best seller and I totally mean it 💙💙💙💙
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Thank you so very much!!!!!
And I literally can’t thank you enough for your advice!
Yes..writers do have he power of words….thanks a lottt!!!!
You do!? You don’t know you MUCH that means to me, Miss Wordsmith! ❤❤❤
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It’s a pleasure always 💙💙💙
The Mystic Inkslinger on her journey to shine bright 🤗🤗🤗🤗, the whole world will know you one day surely
Take care and stay safe ☺☺
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🤗🤗🤗❤❤❤
That means the world to me!
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💙💙🤗🤗
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Oh god!! Rishika!
You’ve written your thoughts out so beautifully! I’m in LOVE with this poem! 😍😍❤️❤️
It’s just so similar to my feelings!
What do I say? It’s great news that you’re writing a novel!! 😄❤️
I’m sure it’ll be splendid!
Also, you can share your feelings with me, you know that right?
Call my name and I’ll be there to share all your joys and sorrows, and listen to your thoughts.
💜💜💜💜😊😊
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Aw so sweet Kamya!! I’m there too, for both of uuu to share ur thought and for me to share mine!! 😊🤗
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Aww! I love you both! And it’s great that we’re there for each other! 💜💜💜😊😊
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🤗😊❤
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Me too! Yes, it is great! 🤗🤍🤍🤍
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Aww,,Kim!!! Thank you so much, both of you. I love you both and we can always share our thoughts🤗💜
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Oh my god!!! Thank youuuuu soooooooooooo much, Kamya!!!!!!
I am so very happy that you could relate, I really am❤❤❤❤
Awww..thank you!
Yes..I know and I will share with you😉 And, you can share anything with me too…I will always be here🤗❤
Love to you!!
P.S. Thank youuuuuuuu so much for contacting me! I have sent you a mail and an invite on Google Hangouts!
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Aww! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️😄😄😄
I know you’ll be there too! ❤️
Love you too! ❤️❤️
I wanted to stay in contact with my beautiful friend! Thank you so much for mailing!
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That is so thoughtful of you, Kamya🤗❤❤❤💜💜💜
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Rishika I love it!! My mind is another lace itself!! Unknown to anyone else either, this is so lovely a message to depict… Oooh I would love a book from u, can’t wait for it to start coming out 😁💕💕
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I can’t wait too! 😁😁
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Aww…thank you! I will share it soon💜💜
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😁😁💜💜
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Thank youu sooooo much, Kim!
Aww..thank you so very much!!! I will SURELY share it with you as soon as I am done🤗💕
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😁😁😁
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Oh I know what it’s like to have conflicting thoughts. Beautifully written,Rishika. And all the best for you novel. I hope you’re able to progress well ❤️
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I am so glad you could relate, Shweta! And thank you so much💕
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This is beautifully written! Very relatable and raw!
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Also, I’m looking forward to reading your novel 😄
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Aww…thank you so much! I will share it soon💕
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Thank you so much! I am so glad you could relate 😀
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This is so relatable Rishika. So I am sure it’ll connect with many. Good luck on your book. Wishing you all the very best 👍🏻♥️
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I am so very glad you could relate, I really am! Thank you so much❤
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This is impressive. All the best for the novel!
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Thank you so much 🙂
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🤗❤️❤️❤️❤️
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🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗❤
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Thoughtful voices
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Thank you so very much!
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FINALLYYYYY!!! Been waiting for u to do this, and it’s beautiful! I would surely love to see more of your novel! Never say never, okay? Pick yourself up, look how many people you made smile today. ❤ 🙂 Proud of you, b. xoxo
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Awww….Elle!!!!!! Thank you soo much!
Yes…I will NEVER say never! You too have made me smile wide with this comment, thank you so much💕💕💕
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Beautifully written, best of luck for the novel. Cant wait to read it
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Thank you so much! Yes..I will share it as soon as I am done :)))
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Beautiful, expressive and deep poem. Loved reading it, Rishika. Keep writing! 😊
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Thank you so much, Nanchi! 🤗🤗
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Wow!!😱
I have a request to make…do check out my blog under the name of The Lightening Bug when you have time.🤗🤗🤗
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Thank you so much!
Of course..will do 🤗
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Thanks a ton!!😊😊
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My pleasure!
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Oh. My. GOD. I LOOOOOVE THIS. I SUPPORT. I love how we all describe this same chaos differently. My description would just be that everything is *so loud* that I don’t know if I’m me or if I’m the wall, echoing voices. Good luck with the novel!
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Thaaankk you sooooo much, Nour!
Yes, it’s funny, isn’t it? We feel the same but express it differently.
Thanks a lot! Good luck with yours too! 🤗
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Awesome you write soo amazingg!!
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Thank you soooo much!!
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Hey buddy…. How are you???
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Hii! I am good…what about you?
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Good dear….
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Glad to know that! take care🤗
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I wanted to join the writing club…. What do I have to do??? Not like a routine writer but I would love to support your venture….
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Thank you so much! I really appreciate you supporting me! You just need to follow our new site..Here is the link-
https://roaringflames.wordpress.com
Thanks a lot!🤗💕💕
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How can I write a post in your club???
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You can mail us your work at
roaringflames2020@gmail.com
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Ok buddy…. Is there any priority topics???
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No…you can write on anything.
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Ok dear….
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Followed👍👍👍
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Thank you so much!
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You are always welcome dear….
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😊😊😊
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Beautifully written Rishika…..
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Thank you so much, Sayani!
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Hey ! I nominated you for the Sunshine Blogger Award
https://thethinkingpenpiyushgulati.wordpress.com/2020/07/21/the-sunshine-blogger-award-iii-iv/
Hope you like it ! 💖
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Thank you soooo much! 🤗💖
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Beautifully expressed!!
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Thank you so very much!
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Hey Rishika. I haven’t been around and so I saw this post today and I have to say— so delicately beautiful and elegant this piece is. You’ve got a marvelous storytelling skill (something that great poets posses) and this poem amazed me to the core. Your thoughts were portrayed in a wonderful light. Keep it up. ❤🙏🏻✨
(apologies for the late feedback).
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Hey, Maseera! Thank you so very much! I don’t know how to reply to this-Just thanks a lot, that’s probably the best compliment a writer can get. And, I think I learnt this from you, so thank you for everything😉
Please don’t apologize! I totally understand, I really do🤗❤
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I’m so glad you feel this way. Your work keeps getting better. Way more success to come.
Wishing you the best. ❤✨
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To you too, Maseera🤗❤
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I think so far you are heading things in the right direction. It is to me sort of dark and moody as the person is unsure of what is going right or not ?? I like this poem Rishika.
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Yes, James, I think you’re right. Thank you so much!
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I wish nothing short of full success for you Rishika with this book
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Thank you so much!
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You are welcome Rishika !😊🙂🙏🌷
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This is brilliantly expressed and so relatable ❤️
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Thank you so much! 🤗❤️
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Very well written!
Hey..I hope you are doing good. I nominated you for Sunshine blogger award. Please check out my blog for more details.💕💕
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Thank you so much!
I am doing awesome…what about you?
Aww…I did. Thanks a lot🤗🤗💖💖❤️
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I am doing well too! It was my pleasure nominating you!!😇😇❣❣
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🤗❤️
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Amazing poem
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Thank you:)
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Thank you!
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