The voices in my head..

My mind is home to many people, they think differently,

They love with all my heart and exquisite thoughts they dart,

They will make you mad, not with love but with annoyance,

They will surprise you, not with humor but with terror.

……

They live within me and think differently,

They do things that surprise me.

……

One says “Don’t give up.” and the other “This much practice is enough.”

They say “God has a plan.” but at times of trouble, leave me all alone to face the challenge. 

……

They tell me I have innumerable friends but not one with whom I can share my feelings as well,

They whisper, “Keep calm, everything falls into place.” but when tragedy strikes, they are the first ones to break. 

One is as fragile as a flower, touch it and it’ll break. 

One is as dangerous as a time bomb, fidget with it and it’ll burst with anger. Your actions you will regret.

……

One is as diaphanous as a flimsy fabric, touch it once and it’ll make you turn back time.

The other, too demure, loves to think till my head explodes. I deplore the voice that broods.

Oh and sometimes, the confident voice becomes a bit too high held, it’s the cause of all my behavior so supercilious,

There also lives a voice too cranky. It’s the cause of my behavior too peevish. 

There is a voice that says “You can do it.” It is making me proactive.

……

One makes me sweet but what happens when anger reaps? It forms a shell to defend any other lapping that protects my delicate heart. 

I hear and rejoice in the dulcet noise. But how am I supposed to figure out which is the best advice?

I need to go to my mind palace." - Sherlock (: | Sherlock quotes, Sherlock holmes, Sherlock

Okay. We all have different thoughts and different people exist in us. I would absolutely love to hear your feedback or any constructive criticism. This is just the 1st draft of the poem so I dunno if it’s good but then again any feedback would be more than welcome.

So I am working on a novel and this is basically the message I am trying to convey. I will share the first part as soon as I am done with it!

P.S. A huge thank-you to Phoenix. I wasn’t too sure of publishing this but she encouraged me and I love her for that! Thanks a lot, Phoenix!

©Rishika Jain 2020. All rights reserved.

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  2. Damn! I thought you were not okay.

    Go for it. Whether it turns out good or not so good, just do it. It’ll definitely make you learn a lot of things. No matter what the feedback is, do your thing. Improve where you should and ignore if anyone tries to demotivate you.

    Congratulations and all the best for it.❤️❤️❤️

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    1. Haha…I am okay. But my character might not be..lol😂😂

      Thank you sooooooo much! Yes, it will teach me something. This is probably the best piece of advice I’ll get. Thank you so much❤❤

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  6. Oh, my Mystic Inkslinger, you always amaze me with your write-ups, I loved it, how beautifully you depicted it 💙💙💙💙
    Keep writing and as I always say, it does not matter it is good or not, keep doing your work, it will slowly be best, the greatest, you learn, you mature with each step whether good or bad, the experience you gain will always remain
    And you know what I think writers have power of words, they can say how much they want even in so less words
    And you do that
    I can see and believe, one day, you will publish a best seller and I totally mean it 💙💙💙💙

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    1. Thank you so very much!!!!!
      And I literally can’t thank you enough for your advice!
      Yes..writers do have he power of words….thanks a lottt!!!!
      You do!? You don’t know you MUCH that means to me, Miss Wordsmith! ❤❤❤

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      1. It’s a pleasure always 💙💙💙
        The Mystic Inkslinger on her journey to shine bright 🤗🤗🤗🤗, the whole world will know you one day surely
        Take care and stay safe ☺☺

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  7. Oh god!! Rishika!
    You’ve written your thoughts out so beautifully! I’m in LOVE with this poem! 😍😍❤️❤️
    It’s just so similar to my feelings!
    What do I say? It’s great news that you’re writing a novel!! 😄❤️
    I’m sure it’ll be splendid!
    Also, you can share your feelings with me, you know that right?
    Call my name and I’ll be there to share all your joys and sorrows, and listen to your thoughts.
    💜💜💜💜😊😊

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    2. Oh my god!!! Thank youuuuu soooooooooooo much, Kamya!!!!!!
      I am so very happy that you could relate, I really am❤❤❤❤
      Awww..thank you!
      Yes..I know and I will share with you😉 And, you can share anything with me too…I will always be here🤗❤
      Love to you!!
      P.S. Thank youuuuuuuu so much for contacting me! I have sent you a mail and an invite on Google Hangouts!

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      1. Aww! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️😄😄😄
        I know you’ll be there too! ❤️
        Love you too! ❤️❤️
        I wanted to stay in contact with my beautiful friend! Thank you so much for mailing!

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  8. Rishika I love it!! My mind is another lace itself!! Unknown to anyone else either, this is so lovely a message to depict… Oooh I would love a book from u, can’t wait for it to start coming out 😁💕💕

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  16. FINALLYYYYY!!! Been waiting for u to do this, and it’s beautiful! I would surely love to see more of your novel! Never say never, okay? Pick yourself up, look how many people you made smile today. ❤ 🙂 Proud of you, b. xoxo

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  23. Oh. My. GOD. I LOOOOOVE THIS. I SUPPORT. I love how we all describe this same chaos differently. My description would just be that everything is *so loud* that I don’t know if I’m me or if I’m the wall, echoing voices. Good luck with the novel!

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  30. Hey Rishika. I haven’t been around and so I saw this post today and I have to say— so delicately beautiful and elegant this piece is. You’ve got a marvelous storytelling skill (something that great poets posses) and this poem amazed me to the core. Your thoughts were portrayed in a wonderful light. Keep it up. ❤🙏🏻✨

    (apologies for the late feedback).

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    1. Hey, Maseera! Thank you so very much! I don’t know how to reply to this-Just thanks a lot, that’s probably the best compliment a writer can get. And, I think I learnt this from you, so thank you for everything😉

      Please don’t apologize! I totally understand, I really do🤗❤

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